x|SilverLight's ♥ Cry`

[silverlight]

A beautiful young silver egyptian mau sat alone in the moonlight. Her eyes were a greyish blue at the moment and there was a soft sound of air as she sighed. She was infront of a puddle, staring down at herself. The moon's glow rippled onward, never ending. And the shadows, flickered under the breeze along with their owners. Her striped legs were still. Her spotted silvery pelt glistened. And her ringed tail curved around her paws. But it was not enough. She looked down hopelessly towards her reflection.
"Why do I even bother to stay?"Her sad, soft voice breathed."ShadowClan doesn't want me near, I have seen it, yet I stay. Why? It may be my birth clan, but I do not feel I belong here. And I never will, not ever since what happened."
Her eyes shined heart broken, at the thought of her love Briarflight. They had met as kits, it was love at first sight. Then after she saw him, with another she cat. Saying his vow to her. ' I will love you til the end of time '
A tear fell, and hit the water. Eneterupting the moon's glowing reflection and erupting the pool with ripples. More hit the water, as she could no longer contain herself. Would she ever truely find where she belonged? Would she ever love again? Would ShadowClan trust her? Was her father thinking of her from the Dark Forest right now? Or her mother from StarClan? No, her mother hated her. And her father sacrificed himself, even though he belonged in starClan, gave his soul to the dark Forest in order to save me, and my brother Starlight. But Starlight no longer lived. She was all alone now, and the frist moment ShadowClan grew suspicious of her again she'd run and never return.

[¥Flamepelt¥]

Briarflight: *steps in* "im sorry for what i did"

[silverlight]

uh dats it? i typed in 307 words..... that was like one short grammar impared sentence. sorry, but i must give the part to a professional

[¥Flamepelt¥]

*sob* sorry im new! *is very angry*

[Moony™]

This is a literate site, with no 'tlk tlk', abbreviations, and distracting/awful spelling/grammar. I also understand many have writer's block or a loss of muse--but please try your best to get at least 300 characters for an RP. Make sure it's a REAL RP too.
No post should all be in 'thought' mode unless in dreams, journal, those kind of things.
Post in literate paragraph form. "Parenthesis" around a dialogue. Those obvious rules.

Taken from the Rules.
I understand, Flame, that you're new. But our whole site circles around this. =)
Light's post is a good example--she'll give you tips. Right, Light? Would you do that for me? =)

Also, Light, fix your Briarflight's bio. It hasn't been ACCEPTED yet. Fix, post, and I'll check it. Once you want Flame to RP; I bet she can RP good once she's gone over some points/tips/rules and will be able to play Briarflight.

So...
To Flame: Read that quote there. And yes, that's part of the Rules we're talking about. We'll teach you how to RP better too. =)
To Light: Make sure Briarflight's accepted first. Fix bio, post that you did, I'll check, and whoo! Accepted. And everything should work sparkly clean.