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[destinykit12]

Destinykit(wolf-cat)

"Can't you see my destiny?"

My age
I am 5 moons old.
My gender
Female.
My clan
My clan is Windclan
My rank
I'm a kit.

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My summary.

I'm a pretty kit. I have long whispkers and a long tail. I like to meow and howl like my mommy. My fur is long and longer in the winter. I'm not very clean so my fur is dirty most of the time.I walk around like any other kit but I walk with my head a little higher. I think thats because I'm a little more special.
My pelt color
I'm a black and white kit. There's white around my eyes that looks like racoon markings. My tail is white with a black tip. My ears are black with white tips.
My eye color
My eyes are blue/green.
My body
I'm kind of skinny but i'm strong for a kit. I have a straight back and i'm long limbed.
My special stuff
I have on long scar along my back form when a big cat tried to kill me. I have a blue star necklace.

My personality.

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My summary
I am nice but annoing. My mommy says so. I think it's because I like to help the other warriors and kits with things. I like to run around and play with other kits. Even though I'm a little bigger then they are. My mommy says I'm special but I don't know what she means. Who knows? Mommys are confusing. I like to help the elders of my clan. I like to watch my mommy hunt. I can't wait until I get older. I'll be able to hunt and maybe be the leader of the clan.
Positive
I'm very nice and loveable.
Negative
I can be annoing and pushy sometimes.
Likes and Dislikes
I like to run/climb trees. I don't like people who hurt my mommy. I hate evil cats.

My history.

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Story
When I was born my mommy gave me a blue star necklace. I don't know what it does. Even though I don't know what it is I think it's very pretty. And the weird thing is that every full moon it glows. I watch the necklace and see what it does. I asked mommy one time what it does and she told me she doesn't know. When I was one moon old there was a big cat that tried to hurt me. Mommy said he wanted to kill me. I don't know why. I think his name was um Bloodclaw. He was a big black cat with red eyes and long claws. He met my mommy one moon after she had me. I will be an apprentice in 1 more moon. I was seprated from Flamepelt 3 moons ago. The cats took me to Windclan to live. My new mom said that they seperated me because the clan cats didnt like me. Windclan happily accepted me but I still miss Flamepelt. I'll see her on the gatherings. I'll get back somehow.
Birth
My birthday is on June 20th. My family member on this site is my mom Flamepelt.
My destiny
I want to be a med cat when I grow up. Or a leader.

Other.

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Picture
Pic at top.
Codeword
I love the world =-)
Author's note
I found this place on google if you type in warrior cats roleplay.

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[Moony™]

Starting from "My Summary"
Okay, first of all, the summary has to be longer. To one paragraph. And you want to stay in topic. Describe about your pelt, how you walk, anything outside that relates nothing to the inside.
"and love to be annoing to evil cats. I hate evil cats." erase this part. That's not something outside right? Put that to your personality instead.

"My Personality"
Summary needs to be a paragraph long.
You want to add more detail. You've got a nice start, but explain it more. How you feel when you meet new people and explain more about "nice". They're lots of kinds of 'nice' out there. What 'nice' is she? x]
I'm sure there are more to Destinykit than that. =)

"I like to swim and climb trees. I don't like people who hurt my mommy. I hate evil cats."
Imagine two mooned kits swimming and climbing trees. xD Maybe just say "i want to swim/climb trees". Also, you are Thunderclan, not Riverclan. So swimming wouldn't be a very good hobby.

Also, you're in the narration of a kit. Which kits don't have lots of memory to start with and their personality can be shaped out very easily. I want you to age her a bit. How about 5+ moons? So she's "stable" around her personality.

"My History"
Right. Again, kits don't know lots of things so your story, having curiousity but less info is okay. I want you to write another narration, that's not from a kit. You know, so you can add more detail.
What is the necklace? Who is Bloodclaw? What is she thinking now?

Also, if you’d like to stay mysterious. It’s OK to leave out some info. Maybe the secret of the necklace was hidden. So we can make that a secret. Kind of like “day by day, I watch the necklace, wondering what it is. I ask Mommy...” something like that?

Everything else
You got a good start, keep working! Good lucK